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Don't Need THAT

Thursday, March 18, 2010

...you don't need THAT...

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ere's an excerpt from WRITING THE BREAKOUT NOVEL by Donald Maass, p. 14,

Over the years I have also noticed THAT first novels tend to feel small.

There is a superfluous 'that' in the sentence and you don't need THAT.

See for yourself.

Over the years I have also noticed first novels tend to feel small.

If you find it awkward without THAT, give it time. You'll come around.

Posted 2010/03/18 at 18h26ET in Don't Need THAT.

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